Not really, I don't know what you were trying to achieve in those sections. If you post some of the story in the workshop though I'll be happy to...
Yes, the later paragraphs still take a long time to say anything. To be honest I think you are trying to hard. Paring the story right back will...
To answer your question: is it ok to cover 2 days in 50 pages? Yes. Time elapsed does not matter, you could cover millennia in one paragraph or...
Depends on situation and character quite a lot but 'How are you doing?'
I don't know that I agree with that. If you are writing a book that is not fun to write, it is very unlikely to be fun to read. While books go in...
Hi and welcome. Fellow newbie here as well.
In the short story I've just started: 2 female MCs, no bit parts at all. In the short story I'm polishing: 2 female MCs, 2 female bit parts, 1...
Favourite weapon in my writing, well depends what you mean by weapon.... In real life I'm a lover not a fighter, mind you I have given the odd...
Wow, that's wow. Was he serious? Apart from anything else he doesn't sound like the kind of person who should be allowed animals.
I get bored. Anyway, all my stories tend to go a certain way... and fantasy erotica, is that a thing?
Arseholes are the best characters! It helps if they come to terms with some of their character defects by the end of course. My stories are full...
"But I'm you're daughter, surely that comes above what you *want* to do? You might *want* to be a nice person, but didn't you see what that man...
You must be doing something right!
I get where you are coming from with this character. In some ways it is an ideal I try and aspire to myself. But then I try and acknowledge that...
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