You only have a setting for now. I assume you intend to write about the people living in the small isolated communities. Try to consider which...
How long have you been writing about that character? It's taken me about a year to get a real grasp on my characters' deeper motivations, fears,...
I hope you'll find this to be the short and easy version: You only capitalize after a dialogue when the sentence ends: Place a comma when...
Minor issue perhaps, but I'm sure they should be double quotes, as in a dialogue: I gave Toby a look that said, "this is a bad idea."
Separate names with a comma.