Thanks for the input. Is that all that is wrong with it? Sorry I will post in the appropriate section next time. An example of giving the...
I'm not sure what exactly didn't make sense to you. Bear in mind its the start of a story, it should make one want to read more to understand...
He waited at the gate without blinking. He had been yearning for this day for over a year. His eyelids fought hard but he managed to resist the...
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