Well, if your villains were masked, readers might ask "why?" To a reader, there should be no reason for a gang member to wear a mask to kill...
In your book, do you give any reason why they load the dead man's body into the vehicle? Was this man important? Are they going to sell his organs...
The second one is correct. The comma is needed.
I think beginning a story in medias res is quite a popular trend these days. If you can do it right, then it will be a stronger start to a story...
Oh, no it's perfectly fine if you thought about it that way. In fact, the way you interpreted the sentence should be the "right" way of...
Yup. It works. :) @Elven Candy The reason why it is still ambiguous (even after Valera is mentioned in the preceding sentence) is because the...
Regarding the part with the gun, you still have the modifier which seems to suggest that Prescott wants to kill himself (herself). In order to...
A film about a man and a woman who meet on a ocean liner. They fall in love and share remarkable moments and memories on-board. Unfortunately the...
Is it just me or is the language a little ambiguous in the first sentence? I know Prescott mentions "girl", but it could very well be two girls...
There are three types of "dashes": 1. Hyphen 2. Em-dash 3. En-dash In this case, you are talking about the Em-dash (there's so much to say about...
In dialogue, the end quotes always go after the exclamation mark and question mark. EX with a dialogue tag: "Are you going to school today?" she...
Let's say that in the beginning of your story you mention key terms and/or names of events, ie, "The Accident", should you explain those terms and...
If you had to choose one or the other: Being able to compose beautifully crafted sentences; they are witty and hart-warming, sad and beautiful....
Separate names with a comma.