Well, she us a pretty believable character despite for the healing aspect. I think instead of transmitting the ailment she should be come...
You could have him go into a comma or something and then wake up with an alternate personality then you could keep your character and lose his...
I am writing a first-person short story, but for the prologue the main character isn't present. Do I just make a third-person prologue? Is...
The names are pretty good, they need more variety though, maybe a varying of lengths or a change lettering. You could change Brass to Brasse...
Xavier is a very hard name to find a last name for. You may want to try something more common, easier to work with, I sadly don't have any valid...
Separate names with a comma.