I thought "telling" was basically unintentionally slipping into omniscient narration.
I enjoy both, but I've read more first person lately. Just finished "Gone Girl", which was a great first person book. I love being right inside...
Yeah that definitely helps. Here's my 2 cents then, and keep in mind they're just my personal observations/suggestions, and it's kind of hard to...
Can you give us a bit of a synopsis of the story? Who are all these characters, and what's going on? Hard to say what would sound "natural" when...
You're right, mixed them up, my bad. :D But seriously, this is a discussion forum, calm down. I stated something, you corrected me, I learned...
If your writing is good enough, you will eventually get published. Simple as that really.
"Pale" and "lined" are cumulative adjectives, they do not need a comma between them.
I prefer God is Not Great, Hitchens tells a lot about his life and personal experience with religion in that book as well. There is no arguing...
Personally I would not use the real names, especially when you're talking about writing a ghost story. That could be highly offensive to any...
For you sentence I'd change it to: A pale, lined hand, knocked, with some trepidation, on the studded oaken barrier. But I'd keep it much...
Think you answered your own question there mate. ;) You know how you can 100% guarantee that you'll never get published? Never finish your book....
Just started reading The Hunger Games, it's got a few flashbacks. The Narrator sees something that triggers a memory, some of them are pretty...
I've just started reading The Hunger Games, I'm just up to the beginning of the main "event". I am totally enthralled by it, what an amazing book!...
Separate names with a comma.