Hi! I've got a question, and I'm not exactly sure if anyone is able to answer without having read my novel, but I figured I'd ask it anyway. I finished my first novel - a contemporary romance - in March, and after many rounds of editing, began querying agents. Two asked for partial MS. One rejected me with a simple "Pass, but thank you". The other just emailed me today, also rejecting me, but with a polite description of what he felt was weak in the first 3 chapters that he read. He said that while the premise is interesting, there is a lack of connection between the heroine and the reader, and that the writing distances the character and reader. My story is told in third person, and the main character is a nineteen-year-old girl who runs away from home to escape her neglectful parents. Again, I know it's hard to give advice when you haven't read the actual text, but I was wondering if anyone had any answers on how to make a character connect more with the reader. I thought about rewriting in first person, but there are many scenes (maybe 1/4 of the book) that do not include the MC, and would consequently be lost. Even though it's third person, I do have her thoughts in first person, sprinkled throughout the chapters. I thought this would have helped the writer relate, but I guess this is about more than just relating. Any advice is appreciated!