ARCHIVED - 5/10/25 - It Began In A Tavern (OOC Discussion)

Those are really good ideas, but it might put limits on the writers who are doing the next entries, and I want them to take the story in whatever direction they wish.

So, I would say, let the story unfold according to wherever each writer wants to take it!

 

We actually dropped a story thread along the way and I'm trying to figure out how to pick it back up:

These two sections imply that Nalki had already arrived:

Yet the next time we see Olive / Bossman is some undetermined time later, and Nalki is nowhere in sight.

I had an idea that perhaps what they thought they heard was Nalki arriving but they were actually wrong and it was Nassim... Except for this portion in Nassim's section:

Which heavily implies that Bossman was already downstairs, despite being called down by someone entering and shouting his name.

So the only thing I can think to do would be to assume the entire time Nalki was present in the scene was skipped, and Nassim arrives after Nalki left.

Does that make sense?

 

It's inevitable that some inconsistencies will happen. We're making all of this stuff up on the fly

Okay, let me see if I can help. Let me repeat what you said so we're on the same page.

So, we have a segment from my entry:

Spoiler: ps102 segment

“Business is very good these days and I need an extra pair of hands. I can take you if you’re up for it. The pay isn’t the greatest but you’ll get free food and free housing. The entire attic will be yours.”

Olive froze. Then the door downstairs opened and a loud voice called for Bossman. It was Nalki, here to make the repairs. Bossman hurried downstairs and left Olive with her mouth half open.

To stay? And to work in a tavern? Such an arrangement never crossed her mind. She was a traveller in search for answers. But maybe she needed a change. Maybe it wouldn’t be so bad to stay still for a while to think of what could be next.

This segment tells us that Nalki arrives to make the repairs.

The next segment is Gravy's:

Spoiler: Gravy Segment

“Sure,” Olive promised.

“Good,” Ravenna patted her on the head and Olive asked if she was feeling any better. “No, not really. Pieces of my liver are still missin’, but I don’t really mind pain. Now, want to go see what the old man is talking about with Nalki? I like that fellow. He’s so innocent and adorable.”

Without a word, Olive took this opportunity to bolt from the kitchen with a smile on her face.​

This one tells us that Nalki has already arrived and is making the repairs. Ravenna and Olive don't 'see' him because he is on the dining area while they are in the kitchen area.

Then we have a segment from EFMingo's entry:

Spoiler: EFMingo segment

The scraping and pounding of repairs, the orderlies cleaning, the heavy steps of Bossman. Closed for repairs. Only better time for my arrival would’ve been night, he thought. Nassim stood as erect as he could muster and raised his pipe staff. With a precision of movements he knocked the door twice with his free wrist hard, scraped a ‘J’ shape on the door with his pipe, and pinged the rocky gravel hard with the metal of his staff.

Thump, thump. Skurrrrishhh. Ping! Bossman froze and his face aged ten years in seconds. For a few moments he stared at nothing. Then he heard Dusca yell out “For the love of the Gods, can’t anyone read a closed sign!”

He caught her as she stomped off towards the back door, “No!” He paused and realized he was too brash. “No. I’ve got this one. You keep to your duties please. I can handle this.” He gave the warmest smile he could muster.

She frowned at him, hands on her hips. “I’ve heard that before.” She eyed him with suspicion.

“Just do what needs doing Dusca. Don’t press.”

This one tells us that Nalki is on the process of the repairs (which is consistent with the previous posts). The post implies that with the pounding and what not. If you read the rest of the post though, Nalki can't be found anywhere despite the implication that he was there.

Do I understand this correctly? If so, there are two explanations I can think of:

• Nalki was there. The POV just didn't show him. That's totally fine.
  
• Nalki was temporarily not there because he was doing something else, which is also fine.

After EFMingo's post, we have mine. It temporarily goes to a hideout before going back to the tavern. Olive is still cleaning along with the others as time has hardly made any advancements. She also daydreams, of course.

After that, we have Louanne's entry. Nassim is being cared for. There then is a conversation at the kitchen (away from where Nalki works at the dining area) about his arrival. Bossman then ventures to the woods to meet with Gamma. While he does that, the others are probably still at the tavern, cleaning and repairing.

From this information, I'd say that Nalki is still there making the repairs because time has hardly made any advancements. The next poster can totally bring him into focus, if there is a wish to do so.

Does my post make sense?

 

Ah yeah, that clears up my confusion, thank you!

 

Thanks for the fantastic run-down, but that segment in the spoiler is not mine.

 

Agreed.

That segment is one I wrote. Lol. Thanks for the information!

 

What the heck? I had originally put this down to Gravy. Then I thought twice, went to check the story thread to be absolutely sure, and I saw something that convinced me that it was yours.

I have no idea what happened there! But I'll edit the post to fix it. Sorry about that

 

No worries! I have trouble with the Quote Feature as well!

 

I posted! It's your turn @SoulFire.

The trouble can be whatever you want. I left it open-ended and I really like our new little rebel group. And I guess Roman is going to have a bigger role.

 

Hmm... there is a mistake. Gamma mentions that Araspeth's mother still cares for her. But Gamma is Araspeth's mother. This was established here:

Other than that, good work!

 

Thanks! I couldn't remember which of the 4 was her mother. I'll go fix that. And thanks again!

 

Not a problem. Maybe I just didn't make a strong enough establishment of the fact.

And hey, we're just doing some 'editing on the go', so it's quite alright! All discovery written works need that.

 

Edited! Does it read better now?

 

Fantastic entry!! My excitement for this story keeps building...

 

Yes, looks fine now!

Same!

 

Thank you! And me too. I am so excited about this story.

 

I went back and re-read the entire RP and I've found a couple plot points to tie together that I think is pretty exciting!

I'm outlining my next scene now and I hope you all like it as much as I do

 

Yay! Thanks for doing that. Your post is going to be awesome!

And I am sure we will. Your writing has been great.

 

...and it's live!

@EFMingo your turn

 

YAY! I love this post.

 

Great piece of writing, I like how you focused on Olive's feelings, and a great addition to the story!

 

Agreed! I really loved the dive into Olive's personal feelings. Now, I am really hoping that Nalki can be a mentor.

 

How's the post going, @EFMingo?
Also, do you want me to alert you when close to the end of your turn? Please let me know.

Everyone else let me know as well, because I don't want to bother you unknowingly.

 

I definitely want to be alerted when I'm low on time!

 

Okay, thanks for letting me know.