I'm taking a 300 level writing class, and the professor is a major stickler when it comes to passive voice...so much that my paper is filled with red marks. I know I'm a good writer, so I can't even imagine what most of these kids are getting back, as I have peer critiqued their own writings. In terms of passive voice, as long as you don't use it for every sentence, I see no use in correcting it. Surely, some terrible writing exists, and passive voice is to blame, but I don't see it with a lot of my sentences that he has marked. [[I SHOULD NOTE- on the back of my paper, he says "you rely heavily on the "to be" form," which I assume he is attacking a passive voice, but the confusion still exists for the items below.]] I'm going to list some of the examples, because I cannot figure out how on earth to change them without making the sentences sound ridiculous and forced. "Even if one were to make the audacious claim that slavery is, in any manner, acceptable, there's no way to excuse such deplorable treatment of another human being." he marked, in red, "were to make," "slavery is," and "there's no way" 1) Were to make- how do you change that without simply "makes" which changes the meaning of what I'm saying? 2) Slavery is- I have no idea how to fix that at all. Without using the word "accepting" and changing the order, which sounds insanely odd.? 3) there's no way- outside of saying "no excuse exists" which also changes the meaning and the emphasis- I'm trying to indict the deplorable treatment, but by changing it, I lose that. I will give two more examples. This professor has me paranoid. He gave my paper a B+ and most of the marks are simply "to be" verbs, so I'm so paranoid now, I'm just going through and taking out every is, are, was, must be, etc and changing them to action verbs, no matter how silly it makes my sentences sound. "There is no justice in a societal contract that denies from men what they so desperately desire from society itself." He marked off for "there is no." Again, I can't see how to change that without making it sound stilted and forced. Finally- "The idea that something is right because it exists and has existed for time immemorial is plainly offensive." He marked off for "something is right" and "is plainly offensive." I should note that this was an essay on Rousseau and the idea that "might makes right" or that something is right because it has existed for so long, people just accept it as being moral. Outside of changing the last one to "plainly offends" which sounds off (again), I have no idea what to do. And as for "something is right"- I have no idea how I could change that. Hopefully if anyone made it through all of this (sorry), you can, perhaps, advise me on how on earth these could be changed. I'm paranoid about every verb I use now, because I certainly don't want to get a B in this class. Any help would be greatly appreciated!