Hello everyone, I'm new here so this post is more or less fulfilling my requirement for the initial 20 posts. When I'm able to post in the workshop I'm eager to post some of my completed stories I am, however, very interested in hearing your feedback and criticisms for this series of short stories I have been writing about off and on for the past few years. It started as something very basic and full of flaws. In fact, sometimes when I read some of the old stories I wrote I cringe at how bad or cheesy it was. Even the title, "Children of the Star," I'm not very fond of anymore, but at the same time I can't think of any other title for it. Luckily, from those experiences, I've been able to avoid certain mistakes as I matured. The plot centers around something very religious, yet nothing we've ever heard of before. The main characters mimic angelic-like beings worshiping their almighty and semi-omniscient creator, who has no form and is made of light, in a heaven-like setting. I say semi-omniscient because the "Creator," as It's called, has the power to plan and see the future, but does not know what happens in between in order for the future to come true. The power to enforce It's vision of the future rests with It's children. "Home" is the word used by the children to describe the infinite and boundless heaven-like realm in which they live. Keep in mind when I say children, you and I would view them as young adults in their prime. The main attraction to this series is what the children do with their time at Home and how they worship their Creator. Through coordinated vocal music, supplemented by dancing, the children emit tangible energy which they shape and craft into solid art and constructs. What the energy finalizes into, depends on the method, mood, and tempo of the song and dance they choose. These pieces of art can be very basic things created by one child, or a very complex structure created by coordinated song and dance from several children. This is how they spend their time and they love doing it. Likewise, the Creator adores It's children for their work and loves every piece individually. It also just so happens to draw It's supernatural power from their worship. Great! So where does the story come into play? If that's all they do then this will be a very short story right? Well, what the children don't know, is the existence of Earth and humanity. The Creator in this story is a very artistic being, so It wanted to create another species of children with a far more complex and intelligent mind set to bring forth even more astounding works of worship. Humanity, however, fell into the worship of each other, their philosophies, their science, and their accomplishments. Several attempts were made to reach out to them, but they rejected the Creator so many times that the Creator withdrew the Light and It's presence from earth and suspended humanities ability to create true art. Millenniums later, most of Earth has industrialized and references to an all mighty Creator are only available in very old manuscripts which is harshly criticized and scoffed at in the general public. The few humans that believe in a Creator are ostracized and avoided. More historical knowledge, held only by the Creator itself, is of a battle between It and the Great Darkness. The Light triumphed and chained the Darkness down in a horrifying pit of everything evil. The Darkness represents everything the Light isn't. Because of this, the Darkness has been gaining strength from the human rebels on Earth. The Creator has seen this, and has also seen a time when the Darkness breaks free from It's chains and envelopes Earth completely. Desperate to ensure the safety of It's creations and to halt the flow of Dark power, the Creator is preparing to send emissaries from Home to Earth to bring art and life to the artistically deaf and the culturally dead population of Humanity. -------------------------------------- There is a heavy emphasis on the innocence and ignorance of the "Children of the Star." When the few who are chosen finally arrive on Earth, the darkness and artistic silence of humanity brings total despair and confusion to the children. They are initially, very afraid. Neither of them have ever been exposed to anything imperfect. One child, however, is immediately curious when he arrives on earth and begins to question the Creator for hiding this knowledge from them. This is where the story begins Thanks for reading!