So I have found that there are a few things that I need to work on, to improve my writing. I have some grammatical issues, and I need to make my prose tighter and flow better. I think this issue is related to the latter but I just want to confirm this with you on the forum. This is a part of an action scene far into the story and I was wondering if you think the transition from the third to the fourth paragraph seem choppy to you? That I am too quick to get to the point perhaps? Would it flow better if I add something about him reminiscing about his childhood or that a bird that just flew by reminded him of the freedom that he no longer has or something? #1 He sat alone outside the village and stared into the sky as the clouds passed by. Though Alcock’s words were harsh, they had brought him back to reality as it was. He planned to enter the Vaan ruins in time, but then what? Even if he found the knowledge that his mother wanted him to seek, what would he accomplish by it? when the world he knew was burnt, and being burned as he lingered in this isolated part of the world. #2 After letting his mind drift away he suddenly rose and grabbed the practise sword that was lying beside him. He swung it a few times and the movements felt natural. He imagined an enemy as he swung in the air, with a quick thrust he aimed at the figment’s head. It missed. He hung his head low, wondering how he would be able to strike a real enemy if he couldn’t an imaginary one. #3 Trying to shake the feeling of disappointment he did the move again and copied the movements perfectly; but as his mind traced away he put too much weight to his left foot and he slipped, almost falling to the ground. Furious he threw the sword a few meters away and roared. #4 As was looking down into the grass he felt a chill down his spine. He glanced backwards and he saw a person standing a distance away, glaring at him. With an urge to hold a weapon he grabbed in the air where his blade used to be. Slowly he moved towards it, pretending that he hadn’t seen the man behind him. As he moved forward he heard thumping noises from heavy footsteps getting closer and closer.