I have a heroine that is supposed to be incredibly creepy and somewhat evil-neutral or vengeful and very emotional. how do I make them creepy? I made lines for her to say, but people keep saying they're bad. here it is... (the things the guy says are follow ups to the lines) guy: girl...can you describe death? heroine: (says looking down) ...death? a black hole...a black hole on the edge of existence that cannot be escaped...it is nothing...just nothing. guy: is that really what you think? (he looks surprised at this point) heroine: (still looking down) ...think? (looks up suddenly and stutters on her words) I know... it isn't exactly written like that, but that's the basic thing. also, picture a dark environment when you read it. oh, and if you have a creepier description of death, tell me, it's important to the scene. (the scene decides her fate) back to the question...how do I make a female character like described?