Often when I read entries here or elsewhere, my attention is drawn to things that could be improved for the poster's style. It could be development of voice, or making a slew of linear sentences more punchy by taking the relevant details of them all into something more concise, among other aspects of style. I end up wanting to rewrite large portions to illustrate the point, rather than going through things point by point, which I wouldn't have the patience for. I don't really want to do that though, because it doesn't give the poster the discovery process that comes from abstract goals. What are people's thoughts, though? Am I right about not re-writing things for illustrative purposes? Do we just preface our critique with, 'I don't know what your style aims are, but this is what I'd do."? What's the best way to talk when you experience this in critique?