My freind has taken up writing fairly recently, and she is terrified about her character being a Mary Sue. I know that a lot of people don't like that term, but I can tell that my freind has much cause for concern. We ran her through Springhole's Mary Sue test, and she got an eighty. Bella Swan only made a fifty-five. Knowing what I know about her character, I definitely can tell where a lot of those points came from. The character is pyrokinetic(in a world where this isn't too rare) but she's also very proficient with martial arts AND chakrams. I told her that she'll probably want to tone that down, but she doesn't want to change anything that would affect the nature of her character. Personally, I don't care. I may not like the story, but writing these sorts of characters is an important baby step in writing. New writers get it out of their systems when they start out, and they learn from experience, I would just tell her to keep going until she tires of the character, but she intends to post it online, and the reviews she gets could not only wound her feelings, but turn her away from writing for good. As far as quality goes, her description seems fine to me, but I can't really understand the story because it's a fanfic for a fandom I know nothing about. How do I help her tone down the character? How do I get her to listen to my advice? Should I just throw her to the internet wolves, or should I try to fix it? I don't think she's ready for the flaw insertion yet, by the way. I think the first step should be to remove her abilities and whatnot.