I have a bit of a problem. A character in my story is having an inner monologue describing the girl he fancies, but whatever I write about the subject just seem a bit stale and sloppy. This is what I got so far: "The sun reflecting through the water drops after summer rain is beautiful. A painting, painstakingly drawn from blood, tears and passion, is beautiful. Love is beautiful. To say that Sarah Johnsson was beautiful was an understatement. She was like seeing the last single beam of light from the sunset illuminating the surface of the endless ocean. She was like a painted masterpiece, with its greatness so absolute making the artist go mad with the realisation of never achieving anything nearly as perfect. She was like love, the one and only love, the kinda love that one would find themselves lucky to perceive only for a blink of an eye. The kinda love artist and musicians have tried to pinpoint since the dawn of art. Sarah Johnsson was simply gorgeous beyond proper comprehension" Sorry for making it seem like I want someone else writing my own story, but I would gladly appreciate criticism, suggestions and/or an alternative path to tackle the subject of describing beauty.