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  1. Ruth Jacobs

    Ruth Jacobs Member

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    Dialogue tag question

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Ruth Jacobs, Jan 16, 2011.

    I would appreciate advice on which is the right way to punctuate this dialogue tag please.

    “There’s no way that happened. I know what you're trying to pull and you're failing miserably.” Despite her anger, Maria tried to whisper on the phone in the bustling station.

    “There’s no way that happened. I know what you're trying to pull and you're failing miserably,” despite her anger, Maria tried to whisper on the phone in the bustling station.
     
  2. Youniquee

    Youniquee (◡‿◡✿) Contributor

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    The first one. Because I don't really think that's a dialogue tag..isn't it usually [Insert name here] said, then that. I feel like something is missing. Despite who's anger? Maybe because this is only one part ^^;
    Hope this helped.
     
  3. Midnight_Adventurer

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    I agree with Youniquee. Because you don't have ," she whispered or she said straight after the dialogue I don't think you need the comma, just place a full stop. Actually I think it would be better if you had.
    “There’s no way that happened. I know what you're trying to pull and you're failing miserably.” Despite Maria's anger she tried to...
    Hope that helps.
    Good luck :) :)
     
  4. Cogito

    Cogito Former Mod, Retired Supporter Contributor

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    You don't have a dialogue tag, you have two separate sentences. Therefore, the first is correct.

    This may help: He said, she said - Mechanics of Dialogue
     
  5. mammamaia

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    the first is correct, but in the wrong place... the action must precede the dialog, to make any sense...

    the second makes no sense at all, since it's not a dialog tag, so can't follow a comma... to make it one, you could do this:

    all that other stuff can be dealt with separately...
     

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