I was revising something I wrote, but even though I was not aiming for any special rhythmic effects, I could not get the words to flow. One part of a sentence read, after one revision, "Whenever I try to write something....", (that might even have been in the original draft), which I think does not flow. It would be better, perhaps, if I could replace "something" with a different word to make it sound stronger. Unfortunately, I seem to be having trouble maintaining a consistent style throughout my revision, one that flows. It does not have to have any special rhythmic effects, but it still needs to flow. I seem to be struggling to phrase things in a strong way whose sound fits in with the rest of my work. Moreover, the very phrase "Whenever I try to write something", seems to be simple minded. It seems to something that a person struggling to use language might write. I don't think this post is violating any rules about putting posts for critique only in the critique forums because this post pertains to one simple phrase and is more about flow in general than any particular words. What do you think I should do in order to make my words flow? I cannot always keep the wording in my rough draft, though it might flow, because sometimes it is messy and verbose, even though they might sound more natural. They are not suitable for a final draft. I have abandoned aiming for special rhythmic effects for now and started focusing on clarity, but I am not able to feel satisfied with words that don't flow, even if they are clear. I have been reading a book, "Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace", which I started reading after my most recent failure with getting words to flow, and I have realizing there are many things I forgot and never applied since the last time I read it. What I don't get is why some prose seems to flow so well when a simple attempt to write clearly often produces prose that doesn't. Do you think the phrase, "Whenever I try to write something" flows, or the phrase "Whenever I try to write something with cadence"? I think the second is even worse. But I don't know if by commenting on that you would be a violating the forum rules, so in your response please be mindful of that. For some reason I don't find those phrases as awful sounding as I did yesterday or the day before. But in some places in my revision, there are sentences that just don't seem to flow. Also, I seem to be struggling to avoid aiming for a special rhythmic effect. I guess I just want my writing to be sonorous, even when not trying to emulate a particular style. So what is your opinion of this?