Favorite quote from your main character

An alien? I thought he was talking to me.

 

True but shorter chains would have been easier to swing and less potential to hit someone accidentally with the narrower field. I'n basing this off writngs with actual historians quoted.

 

"I don't have friends, I have colleagues. I don't have enemies, I have opponents. I don't have loved ones, I have a graveyard - and you're trespassing."

 

"I don't dislike you specifically. I dislike you also."

 

It includes the MC even if he's not the main focus. That counts right?
Aodhan- "A third of all people who wear sunglasses during the day are vampires. It's a known fact."
Caleb- "Really?"
Aodhan- "No, actually, I made that up. But it's probably about right."

 

YOU FOOL! DON'T INCUR THE SQUIRRELS' WRATH!! They know things...

 

This isn't perfect, but I'm pretty happy with it and feel like sharing:

 

I love the Golden Bough shout out, but one thing concerns me:

“Placebo all the way,” I confirmed, “Now help me get these filled, I’ve got bills to pay.”

This has an unintentional rhyme (way / pay). It kind of annoys my ears. I'd rephrase it.

 

Good spot, thanks.

 

I don't see why that's a problem.

 

Amy "The Richmond Ripper" Carmine: There's nothing deadlier to you than a dull sword in your own hand.

 

Seems someone forgot about the pointy end of a sword for the the stabby stabby, like a Rapier.
Perhaps should look for a pointier sword in the future. Though I don't know if she prefers a
cutting weapon over a trusting one. But I do know from a bit of extracurricular research on the
matter that it is good to find a sword that does both.

 

This was in a previous draft, and the character has been cut for re-use elsewhere, but it was still a line I loved writing.

"Don't worry! You'd be surprised how many times I've been punched in the face."

 

Amy: A sword is only as sharp as the swordsman who sharpens it.

She actually loves a wide range of weaponry from atl-atls to Zastavas, and she loves using them on people who explain jokes

 

Corlixia knows that a war-frame combat knife used as a bayonet cleaves through
many platoons of infantry.
Though it seems unfair when you are piloting a 5m tall war machine that can tear
a man apart as if he were made of tissue paper.

 

“There are no knives, why are there no knives, we need knives, I like knives, knives are fun,” April said, rummaging through the duffel bag with the guns.

 

This sounds like a fun read

 

I think its original form gives a nice sense of continuity, and therefore urgency. I like it better without the pauses.

 

"Ah, nope, found 'em. Could you pass over a bandage while I pull this Bowie knife out of my arm?"

 

Favorite for now: "Are you out of your goddamn mind? Why do you think I got so mad the first time you killed him?"

 

Conversation in office between antagonist and anti-hero:
"Take her if you want!"
"I will and I'll enjoy it. I'll return her in the same condition my sister was returned to me. Don't worry, I won't hurt her. Much"

Anti-hero and heroine:
"The first time I saw you all I saw was a spoiled girl living so high up in her castle."
"If you had looked closer, you would have seen that my castle had bars."

Anti-hero and heroine
"How did you find me?"
"I've been following you as soon as you left the house. My guard called and here I am."
"Why can't you just let me go!"
"I always protect my investment."
"I'm not an investment. I'm a human. With feelings"
"To me you're just a means to an end. You are expendable."

 

She’s not a main character, but she is pivotal, and she’s talking to a main character...


A high end callgirl talking to a detective:

I can’t help you, I was on a weekend in aspen. Those one night stands are always like a spring snow, you never know how many inches you’re really going to get, or how long it will last; that’s exactly why I’ll always take the longer engagements.