I have an idea for a story that I am just working out how to start. I am still sketching it out in my head, so it’s still a bit patchy. I would like to get some honest feedback on the storyline. Any advice on how to start the story couldn't hurt. I am having a little bit of trouble. The story is going to be about a group of people taking a midnight train out of town. The town they’re leaving, and the destination they’re heading to will not be specified. The story will start by jumping from character to character, giving them each their own individual chapters; each of them having awoken from a nightmare that they can’t quite remember. They just remember pain. Throughout the beginning of the story they find a few oddities about the train and realise it is not the same. There aren’t as many passengers as what there used to be and the conductor of the train seems very strange. They end up finding out that the train crashed and they all died. Now they are in limbo on their way through the underworld. Limbo will be a strange world made up of strange and bizarre memories and dreams from each of the passengers. The train will then reach Hell. It will stop of as seven different parts of Hell. Each different section will represent one of the seven deadly sins. Each passenger will be let off at a part of Hell depending on what their most major and lethal sin was in life. The story will then follow each of the passengers journey’s through each different section of Hell. The point behind the conductor of the train being strange after they wake up is that he is sort of their guide. Some sort of reaper or something along those lines. I was going to make him the obligatory Mr. Informant character. I was thinking also making one or more of the characters being trapped on the train by mistake; that their souls were lost when they died. I was going to have them escape in limbo and maybe in Hell as well if I decide to make more than one character a ‘lost soul’. That way there were would be a conclusion to lead to, them escaping Hell. That is my main problem at the moment, thinking of a solid conclusion to the story. What do you think? Could it work? Any tips?