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  1. victo

    victo Active Member

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    Forgo the comma separators?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by victo, Jun 3, 2015.

    The six-foot, five-inch, two-hundred-and-twenty-pounder, from Amarillo, Texas, dominated the gridiron.

    Do I need a comma after "pounder" above?

    Thank you.
     
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    thirdwind Contributing Member Contest Administrator Reviewer Contributor

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    It depends on whether or not "from Amarillo, Texas" functions as an aside (think of putting that phrase in parentheses). If it does, then you need a comma. If not, then no comma is needed.
     
  3. victo

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    So it really doesn't matter. Great. But I definitely need one after 'Texas', even if there isn't one after 'pounder', correct?

    Are all of the other commas okay (in the right places)? Thanks a lot.
     
  4. Shadowfax

    Shadowfax Contributing Member Contributor

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    Incidentally, 6-5 & 220 pounds would make him an impressively built athlete, but "dominate the gridiron"? The Refridgerator (William Perry) was 6-2 and 335 pounds. Now HE dominated the gridiron!
     
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    izzybot Human Disaster Contributor

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    You might consider using "six-foot-five" to make it a little more concise. And yeah, no comma needed after 'pounder'.
     
  6. victo

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    Thank you kindly, everyone—very much appreciated. :)
     

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