1. MilesTro

    MilesTro Senior Member

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    Fragment Sentences

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by MilesTro, Apr 30, 2013.

    Can incomplete sentences ruin your fiction writing, or can it be a unique style. I notice I kept writing some fragment sentences in dialogue and expostion. It was hard for me to figure out how to add a complete statement in them. Do other writers have the same problem, or do they leave their incompleted sentences.
     
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    cswillson New Member

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    Yes.

    Use question marks.
     
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    Mithrandir New Member

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    In dialogue, fragments are not only accepted, they're often required for a natural feel. In narration/exposition, fragments are okay if used for a good reason and sparingly.
     
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    mbinks89 Active Member

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    Go for it. It's cool. Trust, brah. ;)
     
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    suddenly BANSHEES New Member

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    Dialogue is one thing. Some people don't say much. Exposition is different. Too many fragments will make it choppy. Or stunted. You feel me?
     
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    If you use it as an effect, yes, you can use sentence fragments. But if you are unaware of using sentence fragments.
     
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    personally, what i do to avoid a fragment is connect it to a previous idea with an em dash. An example would be

    Her sunken belly is the daily cup of milk I drank—nourishment.
    Fragments are fine in dialogue since people can talk without making a complete sentence. If you're an amateur writer, would avoid it since you're not "good" enough to start breaking "the rules."
     
  8. MilesTro

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    I only get a few fragments, but mostly in dialogue. Yeah, I think its natural for characters to speak in incomplete sentences. The sentences still have to be understanding though.
     
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    In general fragments are, as Mithrandir said, often required for a natural feel (mostly in dialog). However from the pieces of writing you posted in the workshop I would say that you use them too often and in wrong and they make the text confusing. Moderation is always best.
     
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    mammamaia nit-picker-in-chief Contributor

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    many writers do, some don't...

    btw. a 'fragment' is not a 'sentence' so 'fragment sentences' makes no sense... and 'incompleted' is not a word...
     
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    Basically I meant a sentence without a complete statement.
     
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    TerraIncognita Aggressively Nice Person Contributor

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    I agree with this. You have to pay attention to how people speak in real life.
     
  13. MilesTro

    MilesTro Senior Member

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    In some books I read, it was hard for me to know which character is speaking in fragments. However most of they do speak natural.
     

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