I'm very new to writing poems/stories, But the forum I was at before gave me no help whatsoever. So I went on a search for a forum that I could get attention and help. I really hope this is it. I started writing poems yesterday when I thought to myself I think I can do this so here I am now with new poems in my head all day.. I'll put the ones I've come up with so far on here. Don't Dwell: Love is love no matter the pain, Pain is pain no matter the hurt so why the complain of lost time spent with the one you loved for the one your with. Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love struck: To fall in love is to fall in death The pain is neverending the rush is always pending the lust is always winning. Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Please don't leave me: The speed of the tires The grip of the road The tears in her eyes The rip in my throat The tick of the clock The hint of a stroke My love is lost Her eyes closed tight Without her Im completely blight. Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ chiller: Decayed flesh rotten bones my heart is bleeding for your throne. -scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The walk: The walk is short but the road is long I stand before you but dont belong. -scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Lost hope: Broken limbs my heart decaying my soul is yours for the taking Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Aim high: The beating rain falls apon sad faces but the breath I take is not for shaking Tears of joy run down my face As I reach for the stars and aim for fame. -Scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Discidium: Rage in the cage But blister in the storm my life is reborn as my pride is torn. -scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Skorn: Tear me away from the pain it helps me to relive the strain of life as a young boy mentally beaten and skorned This is the price I pay for a life of reborn -Scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Miss you: Broken hearts my soul is shaking I look at the moon and I hear the taking The taking of lives spent happy Or lives spent sad our love is lost but not forgotten. Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Life: To live to die to ride the tide. my heart is full of precious ryhms my life is full of precious time. Scotty- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Paige: Your eyes the deepest of seas Your hair the flowing of ease My eyes stare gently at you as you breeze past me like the morning bees. -Scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ My,My: My love is the rain that blows in the wind My heart is the race that always wins My passion is the start of an obession While these things keep me running Without you I'm nothing. -Scotty ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Loveloss: The rush, the pain, the never ending strain. The love is lost, but the pain remains. -Scotty ( I do realize they are short, and I'm working on that but with practice and help I'm sure I can achieve a better poem.)
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Hey Animus! Welcome to the WF! I like your poems, but this is not the right place to put them. At least you'll know for next time... Nice to meet you - Jack
