I finally realized the problem with my writing: it's too pretentious. In the process of writing I come up with really cool sentences, the problem is is that I have a hard time cutting them, and because of that the piece suffers. I like to write descriptive sentences, but when I write descriptively it tends to be overkill. So, my question is how do I fix this problem of pretentiousness. I have this fear of creating a lot of short sentences because even though the pacing is good, I feel that the story itself maybe moving too fast. It would be like this happened, and then this happened, and then later this happened and so forth which causes me to tell more than show. But if I try to slow down the pace by making descriptive sentences about scenery, for example, then I want to make it vivid with description which causes me to go overboard. I'm guessing the only cure for this is to keep writing until I 'get it', but has anyone ever had this problem? How do you fix it?