So I'm going to get right down to the immediate problem: I just started writing a plot line that has to do with Angels and a girl who is part of "The Second Level" where these "angels" if you will, can become visible to her. But, of course, the angels aren't what everyone seems to think they are. Instead of being these good guardians, like the bible says, they are actually horrible, murdering things that try to steal your soul through something called Casting. So far, my main has just experienced the loss of her own Guardian, one of the angels that went rouge against the Others. She has recurring flashbacks about when this Guardian would explain to her things about how the "angels" worked. With that as background, the issue is how it comes out sounding. I've never written anything like this but somehow, when I'm writing it, it just sounds...dry. Which isn't the case with most of the other things I've written. I've tried to add depth to my characters and it just comes out sounding odd. I have a lot of interesting characters that I want to add in but somehow whenever I try to write about them, they sounds just...bad. Even the Guardian, which was one of my favorite characters in the first few chapters, has just started to piss me off. "So," you're probably thinking, "why isn't this under character development?" Well, because it's not just my characters. The plot seems flat. The writing style seems flat. I like my original idea, and I think there are a lot of places I can do with it....it just sounds weird. In short: I feel like I spend half my time trying to explain what is going on... Um. So basically I need suggestions: Maybe things I can do for my characters? Some general suggestions in writing the supernatural, like this? Maybe suggestions of articles or authors I can read to give me some pointers?? Help?