I recently received the following feedback in a rejection letter (from a rather established online publication): "We look for a special combination of plot, setting, character and emotion, and buy less than 5% of the manuscripts we receive in a year. This story has some potential, but you need to do some serious tightening of the prose before it can be considered for publication. It's rather bloated." ... What is meant exactly by bloated prose? I'm guessing a little too verbose perhaps? The story has since been published on a different, much less desired publication. If anyone wants to check out a little of it and give me their thoughts as to what is meant by that feedback, whether they agree/disagree, etc.. I would be eternally grateful. The story in question can be found at: http://carnageconservatory.wordpress.com/2011/11/05/by-demons-be-driven/ Warning: It is in the horror realm and does include violent content. EDIT: If this post is in any way against the terms of the forum, my apologies. I'm not sure what the exact protocol is for this situation.