I. Benjamin Franklin accomplished many things in his eighty four years. A. He was a recognized inventor 1. He invented the stove, bifocals, and the lightening rod 2. He invented a draft for the fireplace and a combination chair and step ladder for the kitchen. B.. Benjamin Franklin was a city-planner as well 1. He reorganized the British Post Office, established a plice system, and fire control organization. 2. He was a key element in giving his city a hospital and library. C. Benjamin Franklin was a military strategist 1. He helped defend his colony from a French and Indian attack 2. He led men to supervise the construction of three important forts. D. Benjamin Franklin was a very active statesman 1. He was a member of the committee that drew up the Declaration of Independence 2. He was a delegate to the Constitutional Conventeion 3. He was also a popular and very valuable ambassador to England and France for twenty-five years. I realize that you cant see where the outline is coming from, i just want to make sure like i put Benjamin Franklin, and HE in the right places to sound right. Any advice would be great. Thank you
I don't see any problems with it, except you need a hyphen: eighty-four years Also, since you're using sentences for your outline, you need to have a period at the end of each sentence. I prefer topic outlines myself where you just have a word or a brief phrase that are like bullet points instead of full sentences for each heading.
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