It Began In A Tavern (OOC Discussion)

Is it ready? Or would you like to pass your turn?

 

Ah damn, I'm sorry. I got caught up after work and didn't write. Sadly I think you should skip me.

 

Okay. Sorry that life was busy. Hope you’re okay.
@EFMingo, it is your turn. Soul fire skips.

 

I'll work on it tonight. Will finish probably later tonight after I finish cooking dinner and whatnot.

 

Great post @EFMingo ! It's now my turn. I'll have to get today's studying done before I get into it.

Before that, I'd like to let everyone know that we've written a total of 6899 words so far. That's very good, actually!

 

@EFMingo - fantastic post! Beautifully written, and suspenseful. I love the way you ended on a prompt for the next writer.

 

@EFMingo awesome post! I really loved all the details you put in it. I am interested HOW Bossman and Nassim met.

 

Entry posted! My post introduces something very big to the story. But I think it will add a lot of depth and an overarching "big" conflict. We can still have smaller conflicts within our characters of course! What I did is just to have something big going on in the background. We don't have to move that overarching plot fast or immediately. We can do it very gradually. I think we must, even. It's how it's usually done... I believe?

Anyway! Let me know your thoughts. I've been thinking about this post for at least a week now.

 

Wow wow wow!! Your entry took my breath away. So exciting! What a fantastic turn. Thank you so much! I am getting charged up for my next entry.

Okay, so, as far as pronouns are concerned, as far as I could tell:

Alpha - he/him ... Beta - he/him ... Gamma - she/her ... Delta (the powerful leader!) - she/her .... is this correct?

But there was one sentence that seemed inconsistent:

Delta lowered her arms. The frost melted, vaporised instantly, and gave flame to the candles. Warmth ran through his robes again. He slowly melted back to his seat as silence engulfed their round table once again.

 

I'm so glad that you liked it!

You got it correct!

This looks correct, but I can see why it's confusing! Frankly, I'm not used to handling so many characters in a single scene.

Basically, the 'he' pronouns refer to Beta, since he was the one that was super cold from Delta's magic in the first place.

This needs editing. I think this will clear it up? Let me know if I should make this edit to the post.

Delta lowered her arms. The frost melted, vaporised instantly, and gave flame to the candles. Warmth ran through Beta's robes again. He slowly melted back to his seat as silence engulfed their round table once again.​

 

yes, I think the thing to do is mention him by name to avoid confusion.

 

OMG! I love what you wrote @ps102. The new characters are great and add another needed layer to the story. I also love the 'it began in a tavern' tie in. I am excited that we have a rebel group now and I love the seasons motif!

 

Thank you! I enjoyed writing it.

I'm very much looking forward to the rest of the story. It's actually pretty good so far! Everyone has made good contributions.

 

You're welcome!

Same. I am having fun with this story and am so happy everyone else is also having a good time. I also am happy hearing we have over 6K words.

 

I spent some time today thinking about where I want to go with the next post. I'm looking at how both of the last two ended, and seeing how I can pull that together.

I'll try and get something written up tomorrow.

 

New post made!

https://www.writingforums.org/threads/it-began-in-a-tavern-official.177866/#post-2043480

 

I loved this. You tied everything together so well. I love seeing where this is going!

I will begin working on my post here.

 

Me, too! I can't wait to read the next post!

 

Excellent!!!!!! It's such a good idea for Bossman to have ties with Gamma and the others. The idea thrills me. He is the kind of man who is a lot more than meets the eye!

 

Thank you! I'm really excited to see where this story goes!

 

Okay, cool! Good to know. I will let you finish that scene, then. I will work on more with Ravenna and Nassim for the time being. @SoulFire seemed to have ideas for Nalki.

 

Not a problem but I'm a bit confused. How would I finish that scene? My turn isn't until three other people finish their own turn. Wouldn't that opportunity be lost by then?

 

Oh, you're right.
Can you give me some thoughts on what your plans were for Bossman? He's part of the rebel group, that's clear. But what's his secret job, etc?

 

Can we also get character sheets for Alpha, Beta, Gamma, and Delta?

 

I wish I could claim credit for the Bossman being part of the rebel group thing but it wasn't my idea. It was Louanne's! She'd know best... and Bossman is her character.

However, I can still give some ideas. He could be helping to fun the group's schemes and stuff like that. He is really kind, so he despises the current political situation with the lab rats and so on. He wants to put a stop to it so he funds the group with some of the tavern's revenue in hopes for a better, kinder world.

This is just an idea. Louanne is of course free to suggest something else entirely.

I'll do so tomorrow. I also have to make the reply to the guide. Sorry for the delay on that! I've been on a race to get the last of this semester's work handed in.