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  1. mashers

    mashers Senior Member

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    Grammar Modifying 'flawless'

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by mashers, Jun 11, 2016.

    Does adding an adjective to modify the word 'flawless' make sense? Here's the sentence:

    It reads ok to me, but I'm worried it might be in the same category as "very unique" (shudder).
     
  2. Steerpike

    Steerpike Felis amatus Contributor

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    You could split the sentence:

    Like many holocharacters, her appearance was flawless. Julian was unsure whether she was a recording of a real person or entirely computer generated.


    I don't think you need a modifier.
     
  3. BayView

    BayView Contributing Member Contributor

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    I think the "so flawless" makes sense in this context. Well, I might argue about whether a truly flawless person would actually appear flawless... it made me think that she was beautiful, tidy, unscarred, etc., but I think maybe you mean that the hologram was undetectable. But that's a larger issue than the "so flawless" part.
     
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    izzybot Human Disaster Contributor

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    I'm not sure. 'So flawless' still kind of implies degrees of flawlessness, which like 'very unique' is an oxymoron. Your sentence reads fine - it doesn't make me immediately cringe - but if you want to be a stickler for precision it might be better to restructure as Steerpike suggested.
     
  5. mashers

    mashers Senior Member

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    @izzybot
    Yes, it was the separating of the concept into degrees, when it is in fact binary, which made me uncomfortable. I am a bit of a stickler for things like this, but I'm trying to be a bit less formal. I think I need to consider @BayView's suggestions as it's made me ponder what I really mean. I picture the hologram as detectable as such due to the mechanism of its display, but I really meant that it has the abnormally perfect appearance of an ultra-airbrushed model or a highly realistic android. I don't think 'beautiful' is quite right here. I'll consider @Steerpike's suggestion to split the sentence up as this is unambiguous without a potentially annoying grammatical faux pas!

    Thanks everyone :)
     
  6. sahlmi

    sahlmi Active Member

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    Original deleted. Seemed to be useless.
     
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    Seraph751 If I fell down the rabbit hole... Contributor

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    I think exquisite would have a better impact (my opinion).
     
  8. mashers

    mashers Senior Member

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    I feel 'exquisite' has connotations of beauty or attractiveness, and that's not quite what I want to communicate. Thank you for the suggestion though :)
     

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