I just got back from a writing group today and one of the many things they mentioned that I could do to improve my story is be more descriptive with scenes when introducing a new setting. If I could get help regarding different approaches to take to do this, I would really appreciate this. The one thing I've done so far is try to come up with a bullet point list of every aspect of the scene. Then maybe I can work from there. -Crime scene -where: Buffalo Bayou intersecting with highway 6 -body dumped -fingers and head cut off -no blood (means murder happened somewhere else) -body placed right at the bank of the bayou -describe bayou in some way? -the way it interacts with the roads -probably murdered last night and dumped -body dressed nice -loafers -dress shirt/pants -wrinkled/askew -probably had an expensive suit that got removed -tan skin where he wore a watch -uncomfortability/uneasy feeling -done this for years and still never get used to it -the dead/decaying smell -pale, lifeless body -air of uneasiness as she approached the body The first attempt: "It was exactly how he described it. The fingers and head were cut off post-mortem. She could tell when the limbs were removed because of the way the wound looked. After six years of seeing dead bodies, she knew the difference between a wound that was created before death verses one made afterwards and so did Green. But when she moved in closer, she could see the tool marks that were made in the bone when the killer tried to cut through the spine." As you can see, I don't describe much here. And this is the closest I get to describing the scene. So I know I can do better.