Late last year I was holding off from writing a lot because of my education. I'm still in the same situation now, but if I continue to hold things off I won't ever reach my goal. I'm getting back on to submitting queries to agents, but since I've been so out of practice and definitely won't notice some important things, I'm hear again for feedback for my current query. All critiques appreciated. October, 3 2009 (My name and address) (Agent's name and Address) Dear Mr/Ms. Agent: A lowly street fighter and a vindictive queen form an alliance against the world’s most dangerous criminal. In the country Alyuwan, underground street fighter Andrew Scaves, prepares for his championship match. During the intercession he attends a ceremonial festival where he witnesses the assassination of the king and queen. A week later the new queen, Malaya appears on his doorstep. Her visit isn’t one of leisure. She blackmails Andrew into assisting her on a mission to suppress justice to a malignant and mysterious man merely known as The Red Terrorist. In just the first week the mission turns into a catastrophe. An allied kingdom is invaded and Andrew nearly loses his life. Struck by his near death experience, Andrew seeks a way to escape the queen’s lust for revenge. Hello (Ms./Mr. Agent's name), I am aware of your current affiliation with (Insert author here) whom has written a sequel to (Insert book title here)whose work reflects mine in the since of using an otherworldly setting to create an immersive story. According to your blog on (x website) you are looking for urban fantasy novels to represent which I have fortunately written. My novel will cater to the teenage and the 18-50 adult demographic who crave to see fantasy put on a modern setting. I hope that you'll consider my proposal for KRYSTAL LIGHT which is 145,000 words in length. I thank you for taking the time to read my letter and I look forward to hearing from you.