My goal here is to make an ever present force in a story that the readers know is always around but never appears until it has to. It want it resemble a scary omnipotent entity that the reader as well the story characters know "Do NOT f--- with." Basis: The world government in my series has an internal bureaucracy called "Blackout" created solely for regulating organized crime after the issue of mercenaries and high frequencies of war and organized crimes reached critical mass in the late 70s. Marking every ten years since its inception as a 'Mercenary Era' for notation reasons (I.E. Mercenary Era 1,2,3,etc.) So in order to help the struggling global economy stabilize the government began less spending on stopping organized crime and put more focus into benefit from it, by recruiting officials around the globe into a network that's able to keep its eye on organized crime 24/7. Using their profits as a stimulus to the world economy as well as bribing authority to look the other way and under certain circumstances also lighten most punishments or burdens (I.E Jail time, Fines, etc.) With such a global and omnipotent force there are certain rules to adhere to that carry severe punishment if otherwise: - Exposure of Blackout's existence will result in the in the culprit's addition to the 'Black List' (Meaning execution of said culprit removal of any record of culprit's existence) - Failure/Refusal to make payment to Blackout will result in removal of protection from Blackout (usually leading to swift apprehension by the appropriate law enforcement due to them knowing where they are) - Rogue criminals who are not within an organization are not tolerated and will not be protected - Extreme crimes against humanity will immediately lead to revocation of Blackout Protection - Crime involving property damage above $1 Million will immediately lead to revocation of Blackout Protection - Crime against the World Government will immediately lead to revocation of Blackout Protection Premise: The World Government has their hands in all profit from organized crime due to the large quantity of them. Rather than attempting to bust them up they instead take a base fee that's determined by the size of the organization plus a 15% of their bi-monthly profit, in exchange organized crime global will receive less pressure as long as they adhere to boundaries set. Breaking any one of the boundaries set will lead to severe punishment with zero tolerance. Did I hit my goal? Is there something I could add or maybe lose to get my desired effect?