Ok so here is my issue. In my writing group at school, we are work shopping each other's short stories. One story, written by a guy in the class, is terrible. It is so ridiculously bad, that I have enjoyed reading it, in much the same way I enjoy watching train wrecks on the TV. It feels like nothing has been done right. The tense is wrong, and shifts frequently (often in the same sentence). The wording feels awkward. The story, which is tragic (two children get assaulted while playing and then watch as their mom gets shoved off a bridge and dies), is told in a way that makes me say “HOLY ****!” when the events happen, but not out of sadness. It (the story) just feels wrong in so many ways. How do I begin to critique this? I want to say nice things, and seriously do not want to discourage the author, but it needs some major work. Any advice?