Sometimes I feel like I try to accomplish too much with one character, and the concept gets buried in it all. I'm sure all writers may face a problem like this now and then, and any thoughts and/or tips on the matter would be much appreciated. When does a character become too dense or complicated. What do you do when that happens and how do you avoid it! o . o _____________________________________ On to a more personal application: Usually when I get a character that becomes just to much to be one character, I scrap it, or I go back to the bare bones and save all the scraps for something else. Right now I have a character though that I like very much, and I like who she is and the range that she covers, but I'm afraid in my efforts to keep her from being cliche I'm making her too complicated. I tried to line up her complexities through time, sorting them out and simplifying them. This is what I've got, and I'd like your feedback on this too. Does this character sound reasonable. Any bothersome bits or cliches? Or even if it's good, tips on making sure I don't get away from the bare bones of herself. Abridged Bio: Milo is an independent, free spirited, proud, and free flowing fox by nature. She was born with an instinct to accomplish and experience the world around her. However, when growing up with her own kind (kitsune) Milo soon discovered she was often looked on with suspicion, distaste, and even a slight bit of fear.(this is an irrelevant background story thing) As a defense mechanism to avoid troubles that arise with these prejudices, Milo transformed herself into a more demure and ditsy creature, the sort of weak and cutesy thing no one could possibly feel threatened by. You see she really wants to belong to someone, since she never met her true parents, and she wants desperately to be apart of her own kind. This constant oppression of her true nature makes her somewhat bitter, and on edge, and so when she is "herself" around her friends, things go like so; independence turns to seclusion her free spirit turns to a rebellious streak and her pride becomes false arrogance And finally, again this hiding behind a facade, this confinement in the mask goes highly against her free flowing nature, and can make her volatile, cracking the mask with an edgy snippiness. The snippy behavior, is just a warning though, push her too far and you'll see what happens when you lock the wind in a bag. Milo is initially a strong willed creature, and still is, but with all the pretending she's become a bit doubtful of who she really is. Don't let the "lack of parents" and "stranger to her own kind" thing give you the wrong impression though. The story she is meant for is a lighthearted romantic comedy, some goofball comes along and teaches her to be her happy self again. _________________________________________________ Ehehehe.... I rambled. Your thoughts?