Quick question.

Which one is correct? Secret option 3 (neither) is also okay.

1. Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than he was of the king. That was because the king did not have such a volatile temper.

2. Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than he was of the king. This was because the king did not have such a volatile temper.

Thx

 

I think both can be applied, but correct me if I'm wrong

 

I think that both work, but that number 2 sounds better. Just my opinion.

 

I like the second one better, too. Thanks, guys!

 

I personally would go with:

Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than he was of the king, because the king did not have such a volatile temper.

or

Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than he was of the king--the king did not have such a volatile temper.

But if I have to pick one of the two you presented, I think the second fits better.

 

ditto on the second sounding better... but neither is great, imo...

 

i'd use neither, the because says the same thing so you are just repeating what's been said

 

Violent tempered Big Blue scared Guile more than the king.

I think that implies the same thing.

Big Blue scared Guile more than the king.

Then maybe show why the king is not as scary.

Big Blue scared Guile more than the king because, unlike the king, he had a violent temper.

 

Both are correct--neither sound all that great. They both create unneeded wordiness. Go with something simpler, like

"Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than the king because the king didn't have such a volatile temper."

or

"Guile was more afraid of Big Blue than the king because Big Blue's temper was much more volatile."