So I want to write a novel, my first, but I have trained myself for years now to write screenplay-- i.e. terse, only what is seen and heard, no character thoughts, no sensations other than visual and sound, no knowledge of the past or future-- only the hear and now and what we see or hear, no POV issues. I have tried converting a screenplay to a short story for a couple of short screenplays, now I want to try this for a feature screenplay I have written and rewritten and rewritten. What I am wondering is could I post even a half page of screenplay (~100 words) along with my conversion into prose and get some critique on what I might be doing right, wrong, ideas for improving the converted prose? I don't think this would quality as belonging in the Writers Workshop here on this site, i am just looking to get help on a very short excerpt example, to see if I can learn by example?