I have an idea for a story that I am just working out how to start. I would like to get some honest feedback on the storyline. Any advice on how to start the story couldn't hurt either. The story is going to be about a group of people taking a midnight train out of town. Each chapter I would jump from character to character, giving a bit of back story about each as the story goes on. Partway through the trip, the train buckles and derails off the tracks, killing everyone on board. I would start the next chapter with one of the characters waking up startled, still on the train, which is still safely on the tracks rolling along the tracks. He realises he must've just dozed off and had a nightmare. But then he looks around and all the passengers seem a bit agitated, like they too woke up from a bad dream, and there doesn't seem to be as many passengers as there was before. Then he looks out the window, and there is a strange landscape. It is made up of things that hold some significance to all the people on the train. They are in limbo. The train makes it's way through limbo and into hell. I was planning on having hell set in seven different sections. One for every deadly sin. The train will make a stop at each section, and whoever is guilty of that certain sin, is taken off the train. Then when everybody has been taken off the train, I will cut to each of the characters as they journey through each part of hell. Before the train crashes I was thinking about having a flashback sequence or two for each of the characters to see what they've done. I haven't come up with an ending yet. So what do you think? If written well, could that make a good read? Any tips?