There is a part I want to include in a WIP where three people turn to address simultaneously one person that just came into the scene with three separate characterizations. How do I pull this off? Part of the story: “Of course they will, darling.” A voice came from behind. It was Lazare. “Uncle… Lazare… Maestro…” the three of them said on the same time as they went to appoint their frustrations to the man that orchestrated everything, but with a subtle wave of his hand he cut them off. Another issue I have is with this scene. Three people participate in it. One is an animal trainer (Gael), one is an opera diva (Clair) and the other is a girl that works backstage (Rosemarie). “I…” Gael went to reply to this expected remark in a reassuring manner when Rosemarie popped up from behind and took the reins. “Of course they will,” she said confidently. “They haven’t eaten for days you see, which makes them amenable…” She knelt by the cage, looked at its lazy occupants and then continued, “… but once we have them in the water they’ll come to life. You’ll see.” She looked up at Claire… “You’ll sing your song, step out on the tightrope and when the clap of thunder comes, the lights will flicker off and…” She jumped up… “… that’s where I’ll toss the ox’s heart into the pool - you know, I only bought it myself this morning and it is the biggest ox heart I’ve ever seen – and then…” She approached Claire with a mischievous act and set her sparkling eyes on hers… “… they’ll go mad over it!” she said and stopped right in front of her, looking at her with her cutest, childish expression. I want to show a choreography of Rosemarie as she is speaking to Clair, because she becomes playful and quite theatrical as she explains the plan to Clair, but this doesn't seem right to me. I want to show animation as she speaks. I haven't seen it as a structure method in a book before. Does this make sense? Do you have any tips for betterment?