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  1. Scarecrow

    Scarecrow Member

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    "Sweated" adn teh proper use

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Scarecrow, Mar 27, 2011.

    Would this be a correct use of the word "sweated"?

    "...my hands clasped before my sweated body in a last hopeless prayer."


    Simply wondering that since there is no direct cause of being soaked in sweat in the sentence is that still a proper use of term? There is plenty of implied and direct cause in the previous paragraph and panic in the sentence before, so does it need to be repeated again?


    (by the way the title is written you'd think I was illiterate) :)
     
  2. JMTweedie

    JMTweedie Senior Member

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    I think I would use perspirant body rather than sweated. I had to think about that for a while and I came to the conclusion that sweated was a non-word. It doesn't seem to fit well anyway.
     
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    Er, you'd use "sweated" like, "I sweated". In the context of the sentence, it would be, "My sweating body."
     
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    I'd prefer simply "sweaty body" or if you wanted to avoid sweaty then "sweat soaked body" maybe
     
  5. Scarecrow

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    All very and true, which is why I asked. Read very weird to me. Thanks for the clarification. In the meantime sweating will have to work as it doesn't break up the rhythm of the sentence. Thanks.
     
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    Wouldn't "my wet hands clasped before my body ..." be clear enough?
     
  7. Ion

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    Use sweaty.
     
  8. Scarecrow

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    Wet seems too ambiguous a word, it's too nice. Back story is narrator is waking up from a nightmare in which he discovers God, so panic. While wet would work in some cases I think anything that would imply the discomforting stickiness of sweat would work better in this case.


    With "sweating": My mouth grasping for some meager breath of untainted air: my hands clasped before my sweating body in a last hopeless prayer.

    With "sweaty": My mouth grasping for some meager breath of untainted air: my hands clasped before my sweaty body in a last hopeless prayer.
     
  9. mammamaia

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    'perspirant' is out of the question, imo...

    'sweated' is ok, if you want the character to sound archaic/old-fashioned [to pompous/pretentious]... its use depends on the style the whole piece is written en...
     
  10. Scarecrow

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    The rest of the piece is written using more archaic language, so if sweated does indeed work for that and makes sense in the sentence I'll keep the original.


    And perspirant isn't a word either so totally out of the question.
     
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    'sweaty' is the modern adjective that would be used here. 'Sweated' has a slightly different connotation from 'sweaty', in that it refers to something that has been forced to sweat, so it's not used really to refer to oneself, e.g. we use it in the phrase 'sweated labour'.
     
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    If you are happy with the archaic vibe besweated will work very well here.
     
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    Yes, "sweated" is usable (because the person made it sweat through exercise) but is not the obvious choice ("sweaty") and so is "marked" -- it draws attention to itself. It could work if the writing is in an archaic or poetic style.
     

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