I've been experimenting with run-on sentences, especially when delivering exposition from a desperate or excited POV character. I've found that the first drafts of these sentences are usually awful. The last one I wrote had three variations of "make" in it. The problem is that I tend to capture the feeling of them by writing them quickly when I get the emotion of the scene, but when I look back, it's usually pretty sloppy. Anyone else use run-on sentences in this way? How did you get good? Any tips?