Okay. So, I got this villain. I reall like her and plan to use her in another story. I was thinking about her and her origins and I hit a bump. In the sense, I think her backstory concept is solid and nice, perfect for history and even great as a story, but. Something is poking at me bad about when I try and think about it as its own story. I feel it has potential, so I am wondering why it feels like it is failing in my mind. It is backstory, so I only have vauge points, but it feels like the vague points are fighting each other. The points. - She is an Alien Queen on a random planet that has very low tech resources but makes up with it by having magic. - Her home is peaceful. People are happy. - She is a bad ass, able to fight masses of highly magical people at the same time. - Her home is attacked by a god who wishes for her to join him. He uses trickier to hide that he is attacking her. - She sees through the tricks and join anyhow to protect her people. This last point could go off cannon for a movie plot. Why doesn't that seem to work in my mind? It is like, we have peaceful place attacked by god, a call to action. A strange world with no tech and magic, which should be interesting, a bad ass lead character who tragically loses. Political stuff like giving up in-spite of knowing he is evil. Also hiding/discovering he is evil. If I went off cannon, I could even see this going into a final battle between them, but she would lose. Her story is meant to be tragic. All of those ingredaints look like they are awesome but when put them together in my mind, it sounds like a failure. Because, - New world is hard to relate too, meaning I might have to be too slow to express it well. - The lead being a bad ass means their is very little for them to do growing wise. Even emotionally, the only growth they achieve is meant to be giving up and becoming evil to protect those you love, again, it is supposed to be tragic. - Her place being peaceful ruins action until war but you need development before then effecty killing any pacing! Yeah, I can figure out how to fix stuff like that! Arg, maybe this isn't such a good story. Thoughts?