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  1. funkybassmannick

    funkybassmannick Contributing Member

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    Too many in a row?

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by funkybassmannick, Mar 22, 2012.

    I'm currently analyzing my ms in preparation for a re-write, and I have noticed that, while my overall ms has a lot of variation in scenes, I find a couple sections where I have two dialogue scenes or two action scenes in a row. Is this a problem?
     
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    I worried about that with Mayhem, but nobody has complained about it when they've read it. I don't think it matters as long as the scenes themselves are well paced.
     
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    Not Sure - depends. Have you posted an excerpt somewhere for a critique, then we might get a better idea, but as El says if you submit it and the publisher / agent mentions it then you can edit. If they don't - no problem.
     
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    Elgaisma- Making sure my scenes are well constructed is my main goal, so maybe you're right and it won't seem too bad once I fix the scenes themselves

    Jowettc- I have only put one scene on here, and I'm concerned if I post too many it will affect its publishablity. But you have a point that getting my writing circle to read my scenes in sequence.

    Thanks!
     
  5. Elgaisma

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    As long as the reader can catch their breath at some point don't worry about it.
     
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    Yes, it depends.... but usually I might be able to tolerate two dialogue scenes, but two action scenes in a row can be tiresome. You are the final judge, so if you don't like it remove it!
     
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    Good point. Yeah, I tend to have more contemplative scenes after too much action or dialogue.

    Killbill - You're absolutely right, the action/action might be too much like the second half of Transformers 3 (Although, hopefully not that bad; I fell asleep for 15 minutes and didn't miss a thing!) I am trying to vary up the feel of the scene, so even though it's action it doesn't feel like the same action two scenes in a row.
     
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    Make them different, with a different tone or a different person, to separate them; or else make it really the same scene with a very, very short break. We don't want to be confused how you get from one to the other. I'm guessing it's probably fine.
     

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