This may be a bit early, given it's a first draft and I'm only about 2,000 words in, but for many years now I've been trying to analyse what it is that makes me think my writing is too, what's the word? Too formal? simple? basic? This may seem like an odd thing to envy in others' writing, but when I'm reading a novel I often find I'm not altogether sure what's going on - not because the writing is unclear, but because... well, I don't know why. What I do know is that it's this unknown element my writing lacks. It's almost like there's too much for my brain to take on board initially, and that it's only by persevering with the story that things will start to gel and make sense. But with mine, when I read back what I've written (which I know you shouldn't) it's all very straightforward. This is the MC, he does this. This is the baddie and he's involved with my MC because. This follows that until this happens resulting in that. Everything is very clear, but there's no mystery or question marks. There's no obscurity. The pacing feels off, as though I'm simply hopping straight from one plot point to another. Am I making any sense here?