Well there may be some issue in this because you are trying to write a completely fictitious novel created from your mind, while trying to emulate the style of Hunter S. A man who colorfully wrote about his real life experiences. The thing with Hunter S. Thomson is that his entire intent was around building out and popularizing gonzo journalism. A style in which the journalist is an opinionated and active participant in a story as it unfolds rather than an impartial observer. As a result of this style the majority of his works are written accounts of his real life experiences (Somewhat embellished and joined together). They are meant to serve as a societal commentary. Readers are willing to accept a much more randomized set of roadblocks in a real life story than they are in a fictional novel. Readers will also violently attack an author who represents stories as real, when they are fictional (see James Frey: A Million Little Pieces). Even HST would tell you that everything he wrote had an intended theme. Fear and was the Raw account of a drug binge. Its meant to feel free from constraint, while never feeling accidental. My major question is what is the intent or theme of this piece. What will telling this story accomplish? HST has very specific reasons why he told the stories that he wrote. He also had a belief in style of journalism that he felt was important. In fictional writing you need to at least tell a plot driven story, a character driven story, or tell a theme driven story (mix and match or all three is nice as well). HST was a Theme writer, who included strong characters.
