Welcome back - I'm not sure of the etiquette here yet myself but I think passages for people to comment on might be best to put in the Workshop section (but check the rules e.g. in case of still needing to do 2 critiques first). Also it's possible to put passages in a quote box with BB Codes so they take up less space on a discussion thread. I'm commenting from a privileged position since I'm not on the autistic spectrum, but from experience of working with people who were I'd suggest to find an in-person course in your local area if at all possible. Online or correspondence courses might not be suitable, and the characteristic of your passages, that I mentioned earlier, to do with them seeming to have a silent axis-of-context might be extremely difficult for any "off-the-shelf" creative writing course to make a difference to. I'd recommend the approach of having a tutor you could meet, at least over Zoom calls. I don't know about Canada but in the UK there would be support services who could signpost you to creative writing tutors with the specialist experience. Wittgenstein (as a prominent linguist who was probably on the autistic spectrum) thought of language as a game played between two people. In writing, that's the writer and the reader. If there were difficulties in the writer conceptualizing the reader's side of the game, including their mental and emotional comprehension, I can imagine that impacting the text in this sort of way - with constant disconnects between the sentences. I believe that all types of mind deserve access to the written word. Experiences of exploitation and hostility are too often the default, and (since you have expressed that you are also Christian) I pray that your writing will reach people in the end as you want it to.
Just find some posts in the workshop that interest you, put in a good faith/effort critique for them and then you can post your piece in the workshop. I'm not sure what the ratio is, but it isn't anything insurmountable. And you seem to be set on having someone 'like' your work. That's not what a critique is. Maybe they will like it as it is, but it's more likely they'll think it has potential but needs some work. People will probably be reluctant to critique something you submit if you demand at least one person 'likes' it.
Two given per each one asked. in terms of how to give worthwhile crit that is covered in this thread https://www.writingforums.org/threads/constructive-critiques.20627/
Summarising what everyone above has already said: Do not pay anyone $10,000 to ghostwrite a novel intended as a pitch for a cartoon series.
If you are serious about an animated series then concept art isn't a bad place to start, actually. To get a series made you need A. vast quantities of luck and determination and, B. the following; B.i. A so-called bible. This contains concept art for the main characters and settings, it contains the background descriptions for each of the characters, it has overviews of the episodic content. A bible is kind of a pitch document, but more importantly it is the reference for the animators, scriptwriters and draughtsmen (if any still exist*). B.ii. An animatic of the pilot. This is one episode with all the scenes sketched out and strung together into a video with the correct timings, but little or no actual animation or final artwork. With those things someone *could* take your proposed series on, maybe on a Youtube channel. The world is full of would-be animators/cartoonists out of college who could do that for you, if you really want to spend your money. Just be aware that the odds are extremely low and, like with writing, the best way to get an animation out there is to be an animator and do it yourself, for little to no recognition. Final concern: Everyone's inner worlds are uniquely hilarious or fantastically deep, dark and meaningful. Its all in the execution. You cannot sell anything on the qualities of the world-concept or we'd all be Tolkien. * Edit to explain what I meant: Draughtsmanship is usually expected to be done by the animators these days, even though they are two different skills.
Being honest, I WOULDN'T DO IT! Why? Whether great or not great (which is what category I fit into), it's my writing (draft). Secondly, get a lawyer and NOW!
