Hi guys, I wrote a small scene today at work, just practicing writing in first person POV. I don't actually like this POV due to the limits it has. But I found when I transferred it to third person I suddenly had a much more richer scene. I wrote it from scratch in third person and it seemed flat. Any thoughts on what's going on here and how I can get into my characters POV more deeply? I'd rather not write each scene in first person, then transfer to third. This is what I wrote: First Person POV I bit my tongue, warm saliva rushing over the teeth marks. I realized I was holding my breath, throat constricted. Footsteps clicked closer. I let my breath out with a silent whisper between my lips. Footsteps drew nearer. I curled myself up into a ball. Watched shadows flicker under the table. The voices grew louder. I clenched the edge of the table with my hands, blood draining from my knuckles. A shadow fell over me. “Found you! My turn!” I closed my eyes and counted. “5. 4. 3. 2. 1. Ready or not here I come!” Third-Person POV (Transfer) She bit her tongue, warm salving rushing over the teeth marks. He’s going to find me I’m sure of it. Her throat muscles relaxed. She let out her breath with a silent whisper between dry lips. Licking them quickly her ears tuned to the sound of footsteps drawing nearer. She pulled her knees in to her chest, knuckles whitening. The voice grew louder. A shadow fell over her. “Found you! My turn!” She squealed. Eyes squeezed shut. “Okay. 5. 4. 3. 2. 1. Ready or not here I come!” Third-Person POV (From scratch) She hid behind the desk. The footsteps grew nearer. Louder. She prayed he wouldn’t find her hiding spot. She could see the shadows of his feet on the other side of the table. Unmoving. A shadow fell over her. “Found you! My turn!” She squeeled and squeezed her eyes shut. “Okay. 5. 4. 3. 2. 1. Ready or not here I come!” To me the Third-Person POV scene that was transferred from what I wrote in first person is far richer and more descriptive, while still showing. The third scene to me feels like it's telling without actually telling. I just want to point out that what I'm comparing is the two third-person scenes. I'm aware that the transfer third-person scene has extra detail compared to the first-person one as it is effective a second draft written in a different pov. Hopefully someone can shed some light on this, and advise me how I can get into that better style of writing my scenes. Thanks!