Here is an except from something I am writing. I was wondering if the contents are too wordy and would deter the reader from wanting to continue with my story. If this is the case, how am I supossed to eleminate this when this type of phrasing is what I consider to be my "voice" or "style"? He had slept well into the afternoon before the sun grew tired of his waste. He turned away from the window and felt warmth gradually absorb into his back. Even in a weeklong heatwave, the rays were always relaxing. He drifted for a few minutes before his eyes shot open. ____ sat up and struggled for his cellular before pausing, thinking of how to contort the night in a way that would absolve him from the most embarrassment. After trying on a dozen or so masks, he left his face bare. "I was hoping to wake up to you this morning." He sighed and let himself fall back down to the bed, hoping for once it wouldn't catch him.